[아카데믹 아이엘츠 에세이 라이팅 챕터 2] Academic IELTS Essay Writing Chapter 2 - by Homeworkvan

안녕하세요 :)
바쁘다는 핑계로 오늘 2020년 첫 포스팅 올려요!
1주일 뒤에는 Psychology 페이퍼 에세이 관련해서 포스팅 도와드리도록 할게요 :)
심리학 전공하시는분들께 도움 되실거에요!

오늘은 저번 포스팅에 이어서 간단하게 아카데믹 아이엘츠 시험 관련해서 두번째 포스팅 도와드릴거에요~!

Academic IELTS 시험은 유학생들의 영어 실력을 검증할수있는 하나의 Tool 이라고 보시면 될것같아요!

여러 대학교에서도 입학하실때 아카데믹 아이엘츠 점수를 요구를 많이 하고있어요.

그리고 Academic IELTS 랑 일반 IELTS 랑은 차이가 있어요!

아카데믹 아이엘츠가 일번 아이엘츠보다 훨씬 난이도가 더 어렵다고 보시면 될것같아요 :)
대학교에서 요구하는 기본적인 영어실력은 갖춰져야하기때문에 일반 아이엘츠보다는 문제 난이도가 더 어려워요.

그래서 저희는 아카데믹 아이엘츠를 기준으로 샘플 작성도와드릴거에요!

아카데믹 아이엘츠 라이팅 및 에세이에 대해서 궁금하셨던 분들은 저희 포스팅을 통해서 조금이나마 도움이 되셨으면 좋겠어요.

그리고 샘플들은, minimum 글자수에 맞춰서 진행된점도 인지해주시고 봐주시길 바랄게요! :)

아래 스크린샷을 보시는거와 같이 보통 Academic IELTS Writing 시험은 보통 문제들이 40분 혹은 20분안에 치뤄지고있어요.

라이팅 수업이 중요한 이유는, 어느 주제가 나와도 자기의 주장을 Advanced 라이팅 실력으로 적으셔야 점수가 잘나오신다는점 꼭 명심 해주세요.

그렇기때문에, 영어는 원어민의 표현방법으로 배우셔야 실력이 쑥쑥 올라가세요!

그럼 챕터 2 시작해보도록 할게요 :)

Q1. 아카데믹 아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 2 - 첫번째 Task 질문:

이번문제는 40분안에 완성하셔야하시는 문제에요!

A1. Academic IELTS Writing - Chapter 2; First Task Answer:

News consumption — whether through traditional or modern sources of media — is a daily habit for billions of people around the globe. What is interesting, however, is that a majority of young people around the world have lost interest in traditional sources of information such as reading newspapers or watching the news on television. With this in mind, it is worth exploring why traditional media has lost appeal amongst the younger generations, and what solutions can be applied.  

In today’s digital age, the younger generation is no longer dependent on television on print media for news and information. In as much as reading newspapers or following news on TV is a great way to get the current day’s news, these options are not always the most feasible for young people who are always on-the-go. 

Moreover, traditional media formats such as newspapers and news programs are not as appealing as digital formats that are brief and to the point. Younger people do not find news and newspapers appealing because they are presented in a format that is tailored towards an adult audience. At a time when digital sources provide bite-sized information, a long, winding story might seem exhausting. 

That being said, some of the online sources of news are neither credible nor reliable. With this in mind, parents and teachers should take it upon themselves to encourage the younger generation to read newspapers and newspapers and news channels should make effort to present news in a manner that will appeal to younger people. 

To conclude, traditional media such as newspapers and news programs are losing appeal amongst the younger generation because they are not presented in an easy-to-digest format and there are more convenient ways to access information. The possible solutions include media houses tailoring their content towards their younger audience and parents and teachers encouraging them to engage with these traditional media sources. 

Q2. 아카데믹 아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 2 - 두번째 Task 질문:

이번문제는 40분안에 완성하셔야하시는 문제에요!

A2. Academic IELTS Writing - Chapter 2; Second Task Answer:

Over the recent past and thanks to technological advancements in telecommunication, modern communications such as texting, emailing and social media are starting to replace traditional means of communication such a letter-writing. In this digital era, texts and emails come more naturally to people compared to putting pen to paper. With this in mind, some people claim that it is no longer necessary to write a letter these days since modern communications develop dramatically. However, in as much as modern communication is fast and convenient, I do not entirely agree with the opinion because letter-writing has a personal touch that modern communication will never have. 

The world today is fast-paced, and therefore it is important to be able to keep up. Thanks to modern communication, distance is no longer an issue as one can chat with another person from the other end of the globe in seconds. Thanks to the many telecommunication devices connected to Internet, it is much easier and more convenient to maintain contact with each other regardless of the distance. 

Nonetheless, just because there are faster and more convenient means of communication does not mean that it is no longer necessary to write letters. From my experience, there is a personal touch attached to letter-writing that does not come with modern communications. There is always something special about knowing that the sender took their time to write a letter – whether it’s an invitation, apology or thank-you letter among others. 

           In conclusion, although modern ways of communicating play a crucial role in our society, it is really important to keep handwritten letters alive because they possess a personal touch.

Q3. 아카데믹 아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 2 - 세번째 Task 질문:

이번문제는 20분안에 완성하셔야하시는 문제에요!

A3. Academic IELTS Writing - Chapter 2; Third Task Answer:

Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you that I have recently been offered the research analyst position in your company and I am very grateful for the opportunity. It is, however, with deepest regret that I must decline your offer.

I have high regard for your company and especially for the efforts towards sustainable production and environmental conservation. I appreciate the time you took to check my online resume and for considering me for the position. I was honestly very flattered when I received the offer.

Although your offer is competitive, it is not enough for me to move from my current organization. I am happy with my achievements and role at the moment, especially taking into consideration that I recently received a promotion. Moreover, I am leading an important project and, therefore, am not able to accept your otherwise munificent offer.

Thank you for your understanding.

Yours faithfully,

Homeworkvan

Q4. 아카데믹 아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 2 - 네번째 Task 질문:

이번문제도 20분안에 완성하셔야하시는 문제에요!

A4. Academic IELTS Writing - Chapter 2; Fourth Task Answer:

The line graph illustrates the relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugar and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 197 and 2009. In addition, the chart shows the overall trend in consumer-price index in this same period. From the graph, it is evident that in as much as consumer-price index increased steadily over the aforementioned period, the same cannot be said for the various food products. For instance, fresh fruits and vegetables rose briefly between 1979 and 1983 then experienced a decline in 1984 then continued rising till 1988 whereby it experienced another decline. Unlike consumer-price index, fresh fruits and vegetables, sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks, all experienced periodic fluctuations. Nonetheless, the prices increased for the three groups despite the periodic fluctuations. For instance, fresh fruits and vegetables increased from roughly around 60 to more than 300, making it the food product that experienced the highest increase in relative price changes. 

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[아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 1] IELTS Writing Chapter 1 - by Homeworkvan

안녕하세요 :)

북미 유일한 Legit 업체 Homeworkvan 입니다!
요즘 바쁘다는 이유로 업데이트를 너무 못했네요 ㅠ
최소 한달에 2개정도는 꾸준히 올릴려고하는데도, 오더가 많다 보니 개인 시간이 너무 없네요.. ㅠ

오늘은 아이엘츠 시험 관련해서 포스팅 도와드릴거에요~!
IELTS 시험은 북미에서 고등학교를 안나오신 경우, 북미대학교에서 입학하실때 주로 요구하는 시험중에 하나에요~

IELTS 에서도 여러 분야로 세분화 되어있는데, 다른 분야들은 온라인으로 지도를 할수 없는 관계로, 저희는 영문 라이팅이 전문 분야이다보니, 아이엘츠 Writing 에 집중해서 샘플 올리도록 할게요~!

아래 스크린샷을 보시는거와 같이 보통 IELTS Writing 시험은 60분안에 치뤄지고있어요~
그렇기 때문에, 어느 질문이 나와도 당황하지 않고 본인 라이팅 실력을 발휘하는게 제일 중요하세요.
대학교 영어 시험은 데드라인이 여유롭기때문에 시간에 대한 압박이 없지만, 토플이나 아이엘츠같은경우는 Timed 이기때문에 시간적으로 오는 압박을 잘 이겨내셔야 하세요~ 

아무쪼록, 오늘은 총 4개의 Tasks 의 대한 샘플을 올려드릴거에요~

아이엘츠 시험 준비 하시는 분들께 어떤 식으로 적어야 점수가 잘나오는지 샘플 보시고 많은 도움 됬으면 좋겠어요!

아래 샘플들은 아이엘츠 만점 기준이라고 보시면 되세요!

그럼 시작해볼게요!

Q1. 아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 1 - 첫번째 Task 질문:

A1. IELTS Writing - Chapter 1; First Task Answer:

The two tables illustrate the sales figures for Fairtrade-labelled tea and pineapples in five different European nations in the years 2010 and 2015. One of the main features is that the sales figures of Fairtrade-labelled tea tend to increase in all five countries. In both Germany and Norway, sales increased by 0.2 million, a relatively small amount compared to the other countries. For instance, the increment in Australia doubled, whereas France experienced an even more substantial increase from 2.5 to 21 million euros. Another main feature is that the Fairtrade-labelled pineapples sales rose in only three out of the five countries. It is worth noting that Austria experienced the largest increase, 16-48 million euros, compared to the Netherlands and France whereby sales increased from 1.6-5 million and 2-6-5 million euros respectively. On the other hand, Norway and Germany both experienced a decline in sales. A comparison of the two tables shows that Fairtrade-labelled tea sales range between 1.8-4 million euros while pineapple sales ranged between 1.6 and 3 million euros, with the exception of Austria. Moreover, sales figures for both Fairtrade-labelled tea and pineapples experienced increments with the exception of Germany and Norway, which both experienced a decline in pineapple sales.

Q2. 아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 1 - 두번째 Task 질문:

A2. IELTS Writing - Chapter 1; Second Task Answer:

Dear Sir,

My name is homeworkvan, and I hired a Toyota Yaris with the registration number 6TRJ244 from your Los Angeles office for a duration of two weeks. Unfortunately, I was involved in a minor accident that was caused by a vehicle running a red light and ramming my car from the side, leaving significant damage on the driver’s side.

I informed the police immediately, and they recorded all the details. A case of running a red light was filed against the driver, and fortunately for me, the other party’s insurance company will cater for all the repair costs. As it stands, I will take care of the repairs and claim the cost later from the insurance company. If you need any further information, feel free to reach me on 626-502-7953.

I apologize for any inconvenience caused and accept to pay the compensation if any.

Thank you for your understanding.

Yours sincerely,

XYZ

Q3. 아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 1 - 세번째 Task 질문:

A3. IELTS Writing - Chapter 1; Third Task Answer:

According to environmental experts, humans have less than two decades to address global warming or risk suffering catastrophic consequences. With this in mind, some people believe that global warming should be addressed on an individual level whereas others maintain that governments and corporations should be responsible since they have the capacity to make more meaningful change. This essay will discuss both these views and come to an opinion.

Since everyone contributes to global warming through cumulative impact, some people contend that there are vital contributions that can be made on an individual level. Some of the suggested ways that people can reduce their carbon footprint include reducing the use of non-degradable products, taking public transport and even eating less replacing meat from their diets with plant-based proteins such as grains and pulses. The basis of this approach is that large-scale changes in consumption will influence corporations to switch to more sustainable production methods. 

On the other hand, some argue that individual action is insufficient in itself to make a difference, and therefore, it is only governments and large businesses that can make a difference. Reports have shown that just 100 companies are responsible for more than 70% of global emissions and taking this into consideration, some people argue that it should be governments and corporations that need to take responsibility for curbing carbon emissions. With this in mind, corporations are expected to reduce carbon emissions and the government is expected to implement policies that compel corporations to act sustainably. 

In conclusion, I am of the view that the focus on how individuals can stop climate change is very convenient for large businesses, and more so considering that they are the biggest contributors to global warming. This is not to say that individuals cannot or should not do what they can where possible but it should not deflect attention from the real perpetrators and those with the most power to make significant changes. 

Q4. 아이엘츠 라이팅 챕터 1 - 네번째 Task 질문:

A4. IELTS Writing - Chapter 1; Fourth Task Answer:

Over the past couple of decades, more and more countries have allowed women to serve in their armed forces, and this has often sparked heated debate. Critics of women joining the military frequently contend that a mixed-gender force would lack cohesion and that women cannot match men’s physical and mental stamina. However, I fundamentally agree with the proponents of women joining the military because ability is more relevant than gender, it widens the applicant pool, and women have crucial skills that can be useful in the battlefield.

First, women deserve a chance to join in the military because gender becomes irrelevant when an applicant is able to meet qualifying criteria. Serving in the military is very demanding; however; if there are women who can meet the same training standards, then they should be allowed to join. 

Second, women should be allowed to serve because it keeps the military strong, especially considering the falling retention and recruitment rates. Allowing women to join the armed forces widens the applicant pool, and this guarantees not only that the armed forces are served by willing individuals but also that there is a deep pool from which to choose individuals with the best range of skills. 

Third, women should be allowed to serve because they possess a range of skills that are more effective in some circumstances.  For instance, there are various delicate jobs that are best suited to women because they possess key interpersonal skills that allow them to navigate cultural differences better than men. 

In conclusion, the debate around whether women should serve should not focus on physical strength, but instead on whether women meet the qualifying criteria and whether they could make the military more effective. 

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